Thursday, January 15, 2009

Ascension : “Antithesis”


This is my entry to Short Fiction writing contest "Ascension" @ www.clarityofnight.blogspot.com.

Visit the above blog and I am sure you’ll have a treat reading the entries. There are over 120 entries and you can delve into the insight of various minds, who have written their perception of the picture.

My take goes like this :

Antithesis

It seemed like an eternity, flying in the sky. His impatience was reaching the acme as he craved to breathe the fresh air of his homeland. He peeped outside the window thinking about his folks, desperately waiting to see them. He slipped into a Utopian fantasy imagining the wonderful times that were in store. Raj's face lit up as he heard the announcement. His lashes were wet with joy as he waited intently for the jet to land...

She tried to hold back the tears as she parked her car in the parking lot. She'd never felt so helpless in her life. She walked towards the foyer and wished that she'd disappear for a moment. She moved towards the escalator with all the strength she had.

Meera felt numb as the crowd rushed hurriedly towards the entrance. She realized that the flight had landed.

Raj walked towards the exit and scrutinized all the faces, trying to spot a known one. He eagerly waited for someone to rise up the escalator.

As the escalator moved up, Meera relived all the moments of terror, bloodshed and shock. The dead, wounded faces of Raj’s parents sent a chill through her spine.

She saw Raj walking towards her. She couldn’t hold back her tears as she saw him wave elatedly.

He held her close, pressing her cheeks with his wet ones. Tears were inexorable.

He looked deep in her eyes and she wondered what to say..

They cried together - for different reasons…

9 comments:

  1. Wow! U sure got a twisted khopdi re! Hats off!!!

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  2. For the blog:
    In Antithesis... u tried to show life's thesis...

    Nicely done...

    For u:
    U r doing a good job of inspiring people to start writing...
    Ur passion has spread like fire (I was tempted to use 'virus' instead of 'fire') and this have helped others... so keep inspiring...

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  3. @A.J: Thanks yaar :)

    @Rohit: so when aer you starting a blog.

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  4. Hi Yamini,

    I have been following ur blog for quite some time now and i liked your entry to Jason's contest...keeping writing!

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  5. @rohanhood: I am glad to know that you liked this piece. thank you :)

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  6. Thanks for stopping by my blog! Your story was a beautiful and amazing read. Your blog is just as beautiful and amazing too! :)

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  7. this one was really touching, liked it back then when i read it at Jason's.
    Like it even more now :)

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  8. cool yaar..deep thinking....keep writing....:):)

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